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The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2022 10:46 am
by Eofor
So I'm not quite sure this one is ready to fly but I haven't made any changes in a year or two so that's a good sign also It's solstice and I'm feeling sentimental.

It is part of the saga of Eofor as sung in Rohan and is a poem in the heroic Anglo Saxon style, with many kennings and alliteration. I will probably record it at some stage if anyone is interested in hearing it read in the style of Beowulf and am sure to anyone familiar with that work, my own love of it will shine through this.

There is a line Elleth may understand better than others but please enjoy or move on as you prefer

The battle of Framsburg

Listen, the two troll hunters were known for courage and greatness
We have heard of those grim wardens

There was Eofor of the Black Tusk, fury in the field
A man of Rohan to start with, he wandered far from his home
Hunting the demon of his youth

And the skalds sing too of Heimir Brondolfson, the fiery hound
That canny fighter who dealt death from afar
Never would his arrows miss, while his bow string held

Many were the trolls who fell to these two
No greater score since Hurin himself
The weregild of Eofor was a heavy price

A trail led to Framsburg, home of his ancestors
No happy homecoming for the horse lord
His unrelenting feud drew him, nothing but war

An oath fulfilled, a return to his people
To ride again the grasses of the Westfold
These things drew him, nothing but war

Down through the mist bands the shadow stepper roved
To cross the bridge in search of flesh
He snuffed the watchers in the dark

A guardian stepped forth, straddled the span
The troll hammer, anathema to his foe
The fiend knew his name, a famous kin slayer

They met on the bridge, each hateful to the other
Roaring Eofor like a torrent down its bank
Ready for danger and eager for it always

Five times he struck, five fearsome blows
Still the rage of the ruin dweller was plain
He lunged at his foe, overpowering

Things would have gone poorly then for the son of Leofric
But for the man of Dale,
No hanger on in a heroes armour

Though Tilion slept at the tiller, the Hound erred not
Barbs burst skin, blood smoked forth
The great bow sang it’s war song

In behind his shafts flew Heimir, keen cutting edge in hand
He drove in with steel, the smiths masterwork
And like his namesake harried his prey

No harder contest had the scourge of men faced
He would pay a heavy price for this nights feast
For to drive off the hound he let go the boar

Thengels retainer was up, slaughter knife in hand
A murderous tusk to the ribs,
Bone lappings burst, Bright blood boiled forth

The Ogre keened it’s death note, it’s last harvest reaped
No more death mongering in the high country
Those brave men had dealt a fatal blow

Away from Framsburg they went by morning
Weighed down with war spoil and a star under sun
The body lay for wolves if any would touch it

The hunt would go on, death price still due
Hard tidings indeed for the proud Helmingas
Woe without ending, nothing but war

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2022 1:18 pm
by Elleth
Oh my...

... you have absolutely captured the feel and rhythm of the old songs. I'd have sworn you dug that out of a musty old book if I didn't recognize the names. :mrgreen:

Very well done!!

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2022 2:14 pm
by Cimrandir
Sir, I must protest. You are far too talented and it's quickly becoming offensive every time you post your work as I roil in jealousy that you have such a mind for writing.

Lol, I'm just being dumb. This is pure awesome sauce. Between you and Eric, I think we've got the foundation for the Inklings 2.0 here in our little group. Consider me as the first to ask, nay, demand a recording in the proper style at some point. Such prose deserves it. In fact, I'll probably recite it to my wife tonight as she enjoys poetry and she's been thinking about starting in on a Lady of Rohan kit. This poem is the perfect intersection of both.

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2022 7:41 pm
by Taylor Steiner
Amazing!

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2022 11:28 pm
by Greg
Loved it!

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2022 11:28 pm
by Greg
Cimrandir wrote: Tue Jun 21, 2022 2:14 pmBetween you and Eric, I think we've got the foundation for the Inklings 2.0 here in our little group.
...and Mirimaran!

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 21, 2022 11:32 pm
by Cimrandir
But of course! How could I forget Mirimaran and the adventures of Daffodil Underhill!

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Wed Jun 22, 2022 2:29 am
by Harper
Excellent!

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Thu Jun 23, 2022 6:08 am
by Eofor
You are all far too kind, especially since I know the quality of your own writings.

Thank you.

Cimrandir wrote: Tue Jun 21, 2022 2:14 pm I'll probably recite it to my wife tonight as she enjoys poetry and she's been thinking about starting in on a Lady of Rohan kit. This poem is the perfect intersection of both.
In my humble opinion nothing is more romantic in the bedchamber than a boisterous hwæt!

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2022 4:27 am
by Togon
You wrote that!? That was pretty epic! I would love to hear a reading while enjoying a full pipe and some ale.

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2022 11:13 am
by Eofor
Togon wrote: Tue Jun 28, 2022 4:27 am You wrote that!? That was pretty epic! I would love to hear a reading while enjoying a full pipe and some ale.
I seldom need encouragement. Next time I have a quiet moment I will test out the new mic my wife gifted me.

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jul 05, 2022 8:30 pm
by Iodo
I can't believe I left it so long to read this, it is amazing Eofor :P

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Wed Jul 06, 2022 11:38 am
by Tom_Ranger
This is not just a flight of fancy; clearly you have put some serious effort in.

Well done.

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Sun Jul 24, 2022 12:08 am
by Desert Loon
I too would love to hear this declaimed - even sung, perchance?

Having attempted alliterative verse, I know it's hard to do on its own, let alone including the kennings for the full archaic Germanic flavor. I salute you.

Re: The battle of Framsburg

Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2022 5:08 am
by Eofor
Thanks Iodo, Tom and Loon.
Tom_Ranger wrote: Wed Jul 06, 2022 11:38 am This is not just a flight of fancy; clearly you have put some serious effort in.

Well done.
Desert Loon wrote: Sun Jul 24, 2022 12:08 am Having attempted alliterative verse, I know it's hard to do on its own, let alone including the kennings for the full archaic Germanic flavor. I salute you.
Alliterative verse is so silky smooth off the tongue that it actually comes pretty easily to me and I think that's because I often forget my lines and have to improvise when doing Beowulf.
I practice a lot by (when I am sure no one is around!) using heroic verse to describe whats going on or everyday things too.